IOC Link: https://vocaroo.com/i/s0Tv6isPqAJL
WARNING!!! I AM EXTREMELY SICK AND SOUND LIKE A BOY AND ALSO HAD A LOT OF COUGHING ATTACKS DURING THIS! I AM SO SORRY!!!
Self Grading:
Criterion A-
I would probably give myself a 5 on this criterion. It honestly took a very long time to do this and plan it out because I really cannot remember anything about The Handmaids Tale or what it was even kind of about. I do that I included a good amount of references to what was happening though and I knew what the chapter was about but struggled to relate this particular section to the entire book.
Criterion B-
For this section, I would give myself a 4 or 5. I really struggled to find many literary features. It was a struggle and I really only touched on basic ones that probably everyone mentions. Usually I am able to find lots in a passage but could not find many in this one.
Criterion C-
My organization I thought was decent. I think maybe a 3 or 4. I jumped around between thoughts and ideas sometimes, but that was mostly because I would start coughing and completely lose my train of thought. There is definitely some work to be done on making sure that everything flows.
Criterion D-
For my own language I would give myself a 3. There was not a high level of vocabulary used and I was very hard to understand due to my sounding like a literal man. So hopefully that part will be better for the actual IOC.
Overall I think that there is so much I could do better and that reading the packets that we got in English would really help me next time.
Emma:
ReplyDelete- Some weird organization here- you launch right into analyzing the passage and I'm not sure if you clearly established a purpose or message for the passage. What is the author trying to do and how does she establish that? Always think about: WHAT is the purpose, HOW is it established, and WHY is it established (SO WHAT)?
- Keep linking back to the purpose of the passage to benefit the listener and to avoid just listing what you see
A: 5
B: 4
C: 3
D: 3
Hey. I really liked hearing your IOC Practice, even with all the coughing attacks lol. Your planning looks very in depth and thats great. A suggestion that I would make is to make sure you state your name before you just jump right in to your passage. Also, its always a good idea to start off with some context of the book if you can and also starting off with a thesis to capture everything you are going to talk about, which helps the listener get in the mindset of the book and kind of narrow in to your argument. I liked how you included your opinion because that shows that you have thought about the book more in depth than surface level. Also, I liked how you included the audience impact, which will influence a higher mark band if you keep relating the stuff in the text to audience impact. A suggestion that I would make is saying why she views things in a negative light/connotation. If you state a quote from that passage, it's always a good idea to say what line it can be found, kind of like a citation. Overall, some suggestions, but good job.
ReplyDeleteHey Emma! Wow you really do sound sick, I am so sorry. I think that you should have established context for the Handmaids Tale, as well as produce a coherent and clear thesis. This could have helped with your organization a lot and help you set up a clear argument. Also, your tone was very laid back and I would suggest sounding more formal and academic. I also think that you should have included the why and how these techniques were used instead of simply saying the techniques that were used. You did however make some very interesting points and I think if you corrected those things, you will do fine on your IOC.
ReplyDeleteHey bestie!!! Firstly, I love you with my whole heart, and secondly let's get crackin' on this IOC stuff. Anyways, your coughing and voice was cute <3 Make sure you provide context in your real IOC to prove your knowledge and understanding of the text. It was clear that you had read, but it's always good to really prove it, and this will help to develop your thoughts more as well. Remember to really dive into the author and his/her social context of the time, and why he/she would be writing this, what it means, etc. Overall, I thought your IOC was pretty good, just remember to include some more background and analysis. I love you <3
ReplyDeleteHey Emma!! I hope you feel better girl I'm so sorry you were sick!! Overall your IOC was good but make sure you establish the purpose! When you do this it will allow you to keep relating your analysis back to so your IOC will became stronger! Overall good job girl!
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